BBS Proof reading services - FAO Rob

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  1. Farnham_Red

    Farnham_Red Administrator Staff Member Admin

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    I just read the Reading ticket prices article

    Great stuff from both clubs.

    I just think the website would look better if instead of saying
    </p><h3 class="headline">REDS AND READING JOIN FORCED TO SLASH THE COST OF WATCHING THE ACTION </h3><div id="lastEditDate" class="lastEditDate">Posted on: Fri 17 Oct 2008</div>

    BARNSLEY Football Club are delighted to team up with Reading FC two slash the cost of watching the action when the two teams clash at Oakwell in December and again at the Madejski Stadium next Spring.</p>

    Admission prices for both fixtures have been reduced to:</p>

    ADULTS - £15.00
    SENIOR CITIZENS - £10.00
    JUVENILED (UNDER 18) - £10.00
    JUVENILE (UNDER 11) - £5.00*</p>

    *If purchased prior to the day of the game.</p>

    Barnsley host Reading at Oakwell on Saturday December 6, 2008, with the return game set for the Madejski Stadium on Saturday April 18, 2009.</p>

    More News Soon.</p>

     </p>

    If it actually said</p><h3 class="headline">REDS AND READING JOIN <font color="#ff0000">FORCES</font> TO SLASH THE COST OF WATCHING THE ACTION </h3><div id="lastEditDate" class="lastEditDate">Posted on: Fri 17 Oct 2008.</div>

    BARNSLEY Football Club are delighted<font color="#000000"> </font><font color="#000000">to</font> team up with Reading FC <font color="#ff0000">to</font> slash the cost of watching the action when the two teams clash at Oakwell in December and again at the Madejski Stadium next Spring.</p>

    Admission prices for both fixtures have been reduced to:</p>

    ADULTS - £15.00
    SENIOR CITIZENS - £10.00
    JUVENILE<font color="#ff0000"> </font>(UNDER 18) - £10.00
    JUVENILE (UNDER 11) - £5.00*</p>

    *If purchased prior to the day of the game.</p>

    Barnsley host Reading at Oakwell on Saturday December 6, 2008, with the return game set for the Madejski Stadium on Saturday April 18, 2009.</p>

    More News Soon.</p>

     </p>

      :) </p>
     
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  2. Micky Finn

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    You missed 'juveniled' nt
     
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    "If actually said" ?? nt
     
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    and he put the corrected 'to' in the wrong place
     
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    Farnham in failed bid for proof reading contract

    :D
     
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  6. Farnham_Red

    Farnham_Red Administrator Staff Member Admin

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    I dont know what you all mean

    Maybe we need a BBS proof reading team

    Oh and thanks for the additional corrections Jay and Mick

    Lucky I am not a professional journalist
     
    Farnham_Red, Oct 17, 2008
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    it realy is very very poor

    all it takes is for a person other than the author to read it!!!

    Looks sooooo unprofessional.
     
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    It gets even worse- that "Forced" one went out on the weekly newsletter

    </p>

    So now everyone on the mailing list who opens that mail will think we're desperate to get shut of tickets.</p>

    How to makea ******* disaster out of a good move by the club.....</p>
     
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    Another &quot;Knob Rowles&quot; classic.</p>

    In't it abart time him and Don Rowing released a &quot;Greatest Tits&quot; album?</p>
     
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    Needs to spend more time working and not reading this board

    Hi Rob, as I know you read everything I write.

    Yes, do some work fella.
     
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