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  1. Jak

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    http://tykestalk.weebly.com/

    Finally got round to publishing the Crewe match report and getting my site going. Feedback would be really appreciated :)
     
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    Father Benny Cake Well-Known Member

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    In the "about me" section, you've missed out an "as" on the last line.
     
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    If you're serious about becoming a journalist you need to work on your punctuation, grammar and learn how to spell and use the word tangible properly.

    Other than that the report is factual, concise and holds the interest. Practice makes perfect, keep going with it.
     
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    Honest but brutal. If I'm ever after an appraisal of some work I've done, I think I'll steer clear of asking you. You'd probably make me cry.
     
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    I'm sure I'd make you squeal like a piggy.

    Bit unfair to take it out of context, I did finish with some positives and what's the point in giving feedback if it isn't honest?
     
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    There's nothing wrong with it at all. I'm just glad I haven't got it!

    My feedback: Jake Warrior could well be the coolest name I've ever heard. It'd take some living up to mind.
     
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    Thanks for the honest feedback, I'll get working on it over the next few days :)
     
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    I work in brand design. You need to get your developer to do some work on the site identity. A wistful image of boats on a site aimed at football fans?

    And as the poster above says, your attention to detail around grammar and punctuation needs a lot of work before it could be any where near commercially acceptable.

    Good luck with it. My advice? Get the basics right first.
     
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    I have to agree. The grammar (for someone wishing to be a professional in the industry) definitely needs tidying up. (Use of capital letters, the construction of the sentances, the way the passage reads etc.). I'd expect (hope0 that a tutor on such a course would be pretty unforgiving in that regard.

    I'd also question why there are sailing boats on a football report.

    The other thing is that it's just more of the same - there's nothing there that sets you apart from anyone else writing a report.
    As someone who has been, on many occasions, roped into assessing student assignments, I'd be looking for something different, unusual or innovative. It may be ok for a football report, but as a student competing for marks Vs other students you need to do something that sets you apart.

    There's absolutely nothing wrong with the content, it just needs livening up a bit. :)
     
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    Just noticed that it's a free site builder that you've used. Pick another image. Or don't use an image at all if it's not suitable.
     
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    Yeah I just chose a design at random, not got round to choosing an appropriate one yet. That will definitely be sorted.

    I'll have a look at the punctuation and grammar tomorrow (it probably wasn't a good idea to write this when I was hungover)

    It will be improved, I can guarantee that.
     
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    I have a bit of an issue regarding making it different (not the feedback itself, you're completely right) but I have autism which means I don't really have an imagination therefore it would be really difficult for me to write in an unique way.
     
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    Keep going pal you're doing well.
     
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    Apologies for pointing it out Fired, but you did have a go at the chap for his spelling lol ;)
     
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    Jake have a go at building a site on WordPress.com, really easy and much more powerful and extendable than other web builders.
     
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    Hello Jake
    Being a mature(!) student at his third university, I can only echo what the other posters have said. You must maintain the highest standard of quality with regards to spelling, grammar, presentation and writing construction, especially on your chosen course. As the old saying goes "If you fail to prepare, then prepare to fail".
    Try to ensure your work stands out from others as enjoyable & easy to read, memorable without needing to reach the levels of a Sid Waddell style prose. Make certain when submitting your assignments they're the best you can produce at that time and contain no avoidable, or basic errors.
    Best of luck with your course, mate.
    Kev
     
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    We have to use weebly unfortunately, I would have preferred WordPress myself
     
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    Cheers Kev, I got in a bad habit at school and college to do what was required and nothing more. I am definitely ridding myself of this habit but occasionally I let the standard slip. Tomorrow I will give this report a major overhaul.

    Thanks for the comment, every now and again I need a wake up call and without everyone being honest I wouldn't have got that wake up call.
     
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    Your honesty does you great credit, Jake, and will stand you in good stead as the course progresses. A refusal to admit to shortcomings, or a failure to recognise them, could have serious consequences. I'm confident you'll be fine.
     
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    Haha fair cop!

    In my defence I did write that on my phone which alters the words on my behalf. :)
     
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